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immigration has become very useful these days what is your opinion about it

#immigration
Immigration
 is defined as
as
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the process of moving to a new
country
 or region with the intention of staying or living there.
Due to
 globalisation
immigration
 has become very accessible and popular
particularly
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 among digital nomads, students and professionals.
While
 some people believe that their population should be more
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homogenous
homogeneous
 and
immigartion
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immigration
 should be banned, I, as an immigrant myself, believe that
this
 phenomenon has many long-term benefits. In
this
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 I will discuss why I reckon
immigration
 to be useful. To
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 with, I believe
immigration
 accelerates knowledge transfer. There are millions of students who travel the borders to
recieve
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receive
 an education
as well as
 find a job in the same
country
,
consequently
 staying there. It might be very
adventagous
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advantageous
 for both students and the
country
 they are immigrating to, since it is attracting potential professionals.
However
, it is
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important
 to
also
 note that the countries these
stduents
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students
emmigrate
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emigrate
 from will likely
experince
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experience
 talent exodus.
Furthermore
,
due to
 political situations, some countries are experiencing war, poverty, failed
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education
system
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 etc.
Thus
, people might have the urge to live in a more stable place where they can be safe,
recieve
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receive
 better pay and ultimately have a better
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.
Therefore
, I believe
immigration
 can increase
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 of happiness and improve standards of living.
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 but not least,
immigration
 might help people acquire
global
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a global
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 mindset. It is
importnat
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important
 to live in a multicultural society to celebrate different backgrounds and learn about each other's
coultures
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cultures
. I think the more
multiculturural
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multicultural
 the
country
 is, the less discriminatory and prejudiced its
societly
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society
 is. To summarise,
immigration
 is widely common in today's globalised society.
While
 it might have some disadvantages, I believe the
advantantages
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advantages
 might
outweight
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outweigh
 them. The phenomenon
help
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 improve standards of living, knowledge transfer and multicultural awareness.
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