The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
This
graph shows the 3 different places in European
country
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countries
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between 1987 and 2007
comparison
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in comparison
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with their visitors. It is clear from the graph the number of people who visit the
coast
was the highest
one
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apply
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in 2007
where
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when
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they were around 75000,
in
contrast
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contrast,
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they were 40000 before 20 years.
According to
what is shown,
number
Correct article usage
the number
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guests
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of guests
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for
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in
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the lakes
were decreasing
Wrong verb form
decreased
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rapidly from about 75
thousands
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thousand
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to 50
thousands
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thousand
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during the period 2002 to 2007,
while
the
coast
was increasing at the same time
nearly
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by nearly
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15
thousands
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thousand
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.
For
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From
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1987 to 1997 the slope of the lakes was positively constant. Meanwhile, the
coast
didn't
Verb problem
wasn't
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fixed once negative and sometimes positive. As for the
mountains
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mountains,
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tourists
were go
Wrong verb form
went
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up slowly until they reached approximately 40
thousands
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thousand
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.
To sum up
, we could say that, the number of visitors in 1997 was
same
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the same
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for the
coast
and mountains which was approximately 50000,but
at
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in
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the mountains was the least almost 30000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coast, thousands with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Significant
  • Trends
  • Comparative analysis
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Growth
  • Decline
  • Steady
  • Surge
  • Plummet
  • Consistency
  • Highlight
  • Reinforce
  • Data representation
  • Time frame
  • Subject matter
  • Overseas visitors
  • Tourism promotion
  • Transportation
  • Accommodation facilities
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