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The graph shows the percentage of total US population aged 65 and over between 1900 and 2000.

The graph shows the percentage of total US population aged 65 and over between 1900 and 2000.
#percentage #population
The given bar graph illustrates the proportion of
US
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the US
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 population during a period of 100
years
, from 1900 to 2000. The units were measured in per cent and the
age
divided
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was divided
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 into three
age
group
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groups
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, which were 65-74
years
 old, 75-84
years
 old and more than 85
years
 old.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the majority of
US
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the US
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 population aged 65 and over, was in
age
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the age
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group
 of 65-74
years
 old.
Moreover
, all
age
group
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groups
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 were increased gradually throughout the given period. In terms of
age
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the age
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group
 of 65-74
years
 old,
this
group
 was the biggest percentage compared with other
age
 groups for the rest of the year. The figure stood at 2.9% in the
intial
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initial
 year.
Additionally
,
number
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the number
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grow
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grew
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 gradually and reached 7.3% in 1900 before dropping to 6.5% in the
last
 10
years
. Regarding
age
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the age
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group
 of 75 - 84
years
 old, the proportion began at exactly 1% in 1900 and increased by 0.1% every 10
years
 between 1910 and 1930.
Started
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Starting
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 in 1940, the number went up significantly
by
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in
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range
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the range
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0.4
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of 0.4
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% - 0.6% and finished at 4.4% in 2000.
Lastly
,
age
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the age
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group
 of more than 85
years
 old, has a small percentage stood at 0.2% in 1900 and remained
unchaged
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unchanged
 until 1930. In 1940, the figure
grow
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grew
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 gradually and
significant
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a significant
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 rise
occured
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occurred
 from 1970 to 2000 and reached
at
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apply
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1.5%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, age, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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