You recently dida short cookery course.The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school.In your letter describe what you enjoyed about the course say how much cooking you have done since the course suggest another cookery course you'd like the school to offer

Dear sir, I am writing
this
letter to express my positive response regarding
cookery
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class which I
followed
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attended
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. I completed my course
last
year. My name is Diwakar G. My batch number is 2024 A. My candidate number is 79. I would like to inform you that I learned a lesson about
decoration
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of plates before serving the food.
However
,
Most
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liked event is
food
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the food
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festival and
it's
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its
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competition which
held
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by you and
yourstaff
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your staff
. It
also
help
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to build a good relationship with each other. It's not only helped with a good experience. But it
also
given
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a good chance to directly communicate to
public
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. I am honestly
telling
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about food styles that related to foreign foods and local tastes are done by me. I have prepared 200
recepies
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recipes
in
last
six months. I
have
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prepared
to
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delicious desserts at that time
according to
my method. If seats are available for next year, I love to attend the next cake class. Because I
ready
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to start a cookery business. So it will help to me. I am
thankfull
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thankful
to who teaches the course to me. Thanking You, Yours Sincerely,
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea to maintain clarity and coherence.
coherence cohesion
Work on developing a clear logical structure by organizing information and ideas effectively.
task achievement
Maintain a consistent and appropriate tone throughout the letter. Avoid overly casual language in a formal context.
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Fully address all the bullet points provided in the prompt to achieve a complete response.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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