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The diagram details the process of making smoked fish. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram details the process of making smoked fish. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the way in which
leather
 products are made to be sold in the stores. At the onset,
it is clear that
 there are 11 stages in the process, beginning with putting
leather
 in the sunlight and culminating in new goods.
To begin
, the
leather
are
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 put under the sun to make them dry.
This
leather
 is
then
 transported to the factory by truck.
the
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The
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 factory
assist
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to wash
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in washing
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 the
leather
 and remove
unwant
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unwanted
materilas
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materials
.
Following
this
, the
leather
 is put in lime soaking to make sure all unneeded
mateirals
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materials
material
has
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 gone.
Afterwords
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Afterwards
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,
leather
 is
rolted
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rolled
routed
 to be
stirght
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tight
straight
 and strong.
Subsequently
,
leather
 is put into soaking with water and vegetable matter to add the colure.
The
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 next phase,
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the learher
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learher
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leather
 is polished
on
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in
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oreder
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order
 to be
with
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of
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 high quality for a long time. Once the stage is
complated
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completed
, the
learger
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larger
learner
 is sent to the factory and there is made a different shape goods.
Finally
, the products are done and
it
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they
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 can be sold as
a
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apply
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different
kind
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kinds
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 of goods.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words leather with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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