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The following maps show the changes in the town of Springer from 1970 until now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The following maps show the changes in the town of Springer from 1970 until now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps given illustrate the differences
of
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 the town
in
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 Springer between 1970 and now.
Overall
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, in 1970,
this
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 place just looked like a remote
area
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 and after that,
this
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has
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 a fluctuation
about
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 infrastructure. As can be seen in the maps given, in 1970, the residents' houses
was
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 built next to
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forest
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a forest
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. After a long time,
this
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area
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 has
replaced
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 by many convenience services and they have divided the
forest
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 into four parts. They have built two apartments and
a
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 airport and a small part of the
forest
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have
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 stayed constant. In the central, they have changed
three quarters
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 of a
forest
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. In the first time, it just had a store and
a
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area
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 for houses.
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, it
has been
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transfromed
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transformed
 into three grocery stores and a school,
a
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 small proportion of
forest
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 remained. In the South, farmland has
ben
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been
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seperated
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separated
 into four parts different.
First
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area
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 is for three stores, next to it is the housing
area
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 and they are surrounded by many roads. Below the houses, they do not change, so it is still
a
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farmland. Next to it
is
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are
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for
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four apartments and around them
also
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 many streets as well. The only side of
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forest
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the forest
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 in the West has remained intact.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, forest with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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