The graph below shows the availability of various sweeteners in the USA from 1966 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the availability of various sweeteners in the USA from 1966 to 2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart depicts the U.S. sweetener availability in
pounds
per
person
-dry-weight form- throughout a 46-year period.
Overall
, the total
number
of
sweetener
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sweeteners
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witnessed a
noticable
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noticeable
increase,
similarly
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to corn
sweeteners
which rose steeply over the period given.
While
refined cane and beet sugars
number
decreased constantly, honey and edible syrups, the least
availability
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, exhibited
the
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a
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consistent trajectory of
total
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the total
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. Regarding the diagram, the striking growth was performed by corn
sweeteners
, initiating from around 20
pounds
for each
person
, which
then
skyrocketed peaking
approximately
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at approximately
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90
pounds
in 1999.
This
category
conclude
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the year at 60
pounds
after
droppping
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dropping
slightly
whereas
refined cane and beet sugars have a margin discrepancy, just over 60
pounds
per
person
, after retailing
about
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the
former
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past
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25 years. The
number
of cane and beet sugars
otensibly
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ostensibly
the highest product, standing at 100
pound
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pounds
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at
first,
before
went
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going
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down and eventually being
surprassed
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surpassed
suppressed
surprised
by corn
sweeteners
.
On the other hand
,
unwavering
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pattern with a steady fluctuation was experienced by honey and syrups, starting at below 20
pounds
per
person
. Despite the small
number
of availability, honey was always greater in comparison to edible syrups over the periods, particularly the latter which ever dipped
at
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0
pounds
at
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in
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1994. Both of those
sweeteners
ended the years at the initial point.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pounds, person, number, sweeteners with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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