You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I read an advertisement in an Australian magazine for living with your family and looking after your six-year-old child. I am writing to inform you that I am interested in applying for

this

job as I am doing a course in Childcare and enjoy living with children as well. I am currently a student in a Childcare course and want to gain practical knowledge of my field of study. It will be helpful for my future job prospects as well. I will be pleased to gain

this

experience by looking after your child. I believe that I am a suitable person for

this

post as I have all the qualities required. I enjoy the company of children and am

also

a very patient person.

In addition

,I have the skill to involve children in constructive tasks that are useful for their

overall

development. Discussing my free time hobbies, I go for a walk in the evening daily and enjoy outdoor activities as well.

Moreover

, I have a creative mind and

will

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love to teach creative things to your child. Looking forward to your kind consideration. Yours faithfully, Rohan Mishra

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task achievement

The letter provides some relevant details, but it could include more specific information linking to the requirements of the job, such as previous child care experience or specific skills related to child development.

coherence cohesion

The structure is generally logical, yet transitions between ideas could be smoother to improve readability. Consider using cohesive devices to better connect your sentences and paragraphs.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

192 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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The Greeting

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