The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market.

The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market.
The following charts show information about
Japanese
tourism from 1985 until 1995
then
, it
also
shows the proportion of
Japanese
in Australia.
It is clear that
the
Japanese
population have a big impact on tourism but
this
impact has increased during those years and it has slowed thanks to the number of
Japanese
tourists and the Australian tourist market. Focusing on the first document, the number of people travelling from Japan has increased since 1985. In these years the number was around 4,5 million persons and has
increase
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increased
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to almost 16 million in 1995.
Then
, in Australia, the
Japanese
tourist market
also
increased during these dates. Starting with 2 per cent in 1995 and
this
proportion grew to 6% in 1999.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japanese with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.

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  • tourist market
  • overseas travel
  • tourism industry
  • international campaigns
  • economic prosperity
  • travel preferences
  • market share
  • fluctuations
  • peak
  • trend
  • attracting
  • destination
  • variability
  • contributing factors
  • currency exchange rates
  • speculate
  • tourism policies
  • competitive markets
  • popularity
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