The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market.
The following charts show information about
Japanese
tourism from 1985 until 1995 then
, it also
shows the proportion of Japanese
in Australia.
It is clear that
the Japanese
population have a big impact on tourism but this
impact has increased during those years and it has slowed thanks to the number of Japanese
tourists and the Australian tourist market.
Focusing on the first document, the number of people travelling from Japan has increased since 1985. In these years the number was around 4,5 million persons and has increase
to almost 16 million in 1995.
Change the verb form
increased
Then
, in Australia, the Japanese
tourist market also
increased during these dates. Starting with 2 per cent in 1995 and this
proportion grew to 6% in 1999.Submitted by santos_dij on
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