The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five autralia cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five autralia cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart depicts survey results of people
purchase on
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coffee
and tea in five different states in Australia. The data has been calibrated in percentage.
Overall
, it is clearly seen that getting drinks in a cafe is the
most
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favourite to have
one
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in almost every city.
In contrast
, purchasing fresh
coffee
is the least favourite to own a drink. First and foremost, in Sydney and Melbourne, the
figure
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figures
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of both cities are look alike
whareas
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whereas
the
percentage
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percentages
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in
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for
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buying fresh
coffee
were 44% and 43%, 46% and 48% for instant
coffee
, 61% and 64% for
baverages
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beverages
from a cafe.
Furthermore
, in Brisbane and
Adeleide
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Adelaide
buying fresh
coffee
was
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accounted for around 34%. Meanwhile, the figure
of
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for
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having
right
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one right
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away caffeine drinks was 53% and getting one
in store
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was 56% respectively. What is more, in Hobart, the sale of instant
beverage
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beverages
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was the highest among the cities, it was
approximatey
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approximately
54%. Purchasing
fresh
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a fresh
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one was only 37%.
In addition
, the number of buying from
store
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stores
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was two times higher than fresh, over 63%. To draw the conclusion, it is visible that people
loved
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to pay for a drink from a store rather than make it at home.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • consumption
  • beverage
  • preference
  • compare
  • quantities
  • supermarkets
  • cafes
  • consume
  • patterns
  • notable
  • significant
  • trends
  • demographic
  • gender
  • habit
  • occasionally
  • frequently
  • cultural influence
  • workdays
  • weekends
  • paraphrase
  • analyze
  • summarize
  • draw conclusions
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