write a referrral letterr to community health nurse
I am writing to refer Alfred Billy who has
diagnosed
Add a missing verb
been diagnosed
skin
cancer. Now he is set to be discharged into your care.
Mr Alfred was presented to our care with Change preposition
with skin
diagnosis
of skin cancer( basal cell carcinoma)(neck) Add an article
a diagnosis
nodular
basal cell carcinoma. During hospitalization, skin Correct word choice
and nodular
biospy
is taken for pathological study and has undergone removal of CCB. He was prescribed Correct your spelling
biopsy
panedein
forte 500mg for pain. Change the capitalization
Panedein
Therefore
he is maintaining good health at the time of discharge.
Alfred lives with his wife and as a truck driver. He had a habit of consuming liquor for past
30 years and smoking. He has no past medical history.
I would highly appreciate it if you could take of Correct article usage
the past
Alfred
health condition on the daily observation. Kindly monitor his medication compliance as per Change noun form
Alfred's
Correct article usage
the doctor
doctor
advice.
If you have any doubt, don't hesitate to contact me.
yours sincerely
nurseChange noun form
doctor's
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Coherence and Cohesion
The letter presents the referral case with basic information and structure but lacks formality and detail in some areas. To improve coherence and cohesion, ensure that the letter has a clear introductory sentence and more cohesive devices to connect ideas smoothly between sentences and paragraphs. Aim to present each piece of information in a planned and organized manner, which includes using paragraphs effectively to separate different ideas or pieces of information.
Task Achievement
The overall task is achieved, and the main points are covered. However, to enhance task response, ensure to include full patient details (e.g., age), specific guidance for the nurse's roles, and a more detailed treatment plan and follow-up. Additionally, ensure you address any privacy concerns by not disclosing sensitive patient information without consent.
The Greeting
Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.
Always start an informal letter in the ways:
- Dear + name
- Hi / Hello + name
‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.
For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:
- Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
- Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.