8/1 Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Nowadays, more
people
regard
humans should protect Verb problem
think
environment
by reducing daily waste. Add an article
the environment
Therefore
, some believe that manufacturing
industry and supermarkets are responsible Correct article usage
the manufacturing
to decrease
the wrapping of Change preposition
for decreasing
products
, others
think Correct word choice
while others
consumers
could prevent waste by avoid
buying overwrapping Change the form of the verb
avoiding
products
. The following content will outline both stances and explain my opinion.
Firstly
, competition of
attracting customers might be the major factor of overwrapping. Nowadays, because of convenient transport, Change preposition
in
people
could
find many similar types of Wrong verb form
can
products
in the shops, it would be a competitive situation for the producers to sell their items. As a result
, an attractive appearance to catch consumers
' eyes would be a vital way of selling. For example
, some children prefer to choose snacks which have animation or cartoon figures on the wrapping.
Secondly
, consumers
' options would also
lead to overwrapping, for instance
, during the New Year, people
would prefer to buy the
Correct article usage
apply
products
which have the New Year decorations rather than to
choose Fix the infinitive
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
one
with simple wrap papers. Correct pronoun usage
ones
In other words
, if consumers
stop judging the criteria of purchasing by its packaging, the manufacturers and supermarkets would also
stop these actions. For example
, shopping centres and supermarkets could provide some incentives to encourage consumers
choosing
Change the verb form
to choose
the
simple package Correct article usage
apply
products
, such
as offer
a discount, Wrong verb form
offering
Correct word choice
and put
put
these Wrong verb form
putting
products
on sale, in order to enhance people
's willingness to buy them.
In conclusion, the competition between producers and the preference of customers lead
to the overwrapping situation. Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
As a result
, I believe both of them are responsible to reduce
Change preposition
for reducing
the
Correct article usage
apply
every day
waste.Replace the word
everyday
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