8/1 Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, more
people
regard
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humans should protect
environment
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the environment
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by reducing daily waste.
Therefore
, some believe that
manufacturing
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the manufacturing
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industry and supermarkets are responsible
to decrease
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for decreasing
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the wrapping of
products
,
others
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while others
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think
consumers
could prevent waste by
avoid
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avoiding
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buying overwrapping
products
. The following content will outline both stances and explain my opinion.
Firstly
, competition
of
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in
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attracting customers might be the major factor of overwrapping. Nowadays, because of convenient transport,
people
could
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can
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find many similar types of
products
in the shops, it would be a competitive situation for the producers to sell their items.
As a result
, an attractive appearance to catch
consumers
' eyes would be a vital way of selling.
For example
, some children prefer to choose snacks which have animation or cartoon figures on the wrapping.
Secondly
,
consumers
' options would
also
lead to overwrapping,
for instance
, during the New Year,
people
would prefer to buy
the
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apply
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products
which have the New Year decorations rather than
to
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apply
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choose
the
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apply
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one
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ones
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with simple wrap papers.
In other words
, if
consumers
stop judging the criteria of purchasing by its packaging, the manufacturers and supermarkets would
also
stop these actions.
For example
, shopping centres and supermarkets could provide some incentives to encourage
consumers
choosing
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to choose
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the
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apply
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simple package
products
,
such
as
offer
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offering
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a discount,
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and put
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put
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putting
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these
products
on sale, in order to enhance
people
's willingness to buy them. In conclusion, the competition between producers and the preference of customers
lead
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leads
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to the overwrapping situation.
As a result
, I believe both of them are responsible
to reduce
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for reducing
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the
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apply
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every day
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waste.
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Coherence Cohesion
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Task Achievement
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Eco-friendly
  • Carbon footprint
  • Excessive packaging
  • Biodegradable materials
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Consumer advocacy
  • Environmental stewardship
  • Waste reduction
  • Recycling initiatives
  • Green practices
  • Minimalist lifestyle
  • Resource conservation
  • Sustainable consumption
  • Packaging alternatives
  • Regulatory measures
  • Ethical choices
  • Environmental impact assessment
  • Renewable resources
  • Compostable packaging
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