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The graph below shows the population figures of different types of wild birds in the one country between 1970 and 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the population figures of different types of wild birds in the one country between 1970 and 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The chart provides information about the numbers of three various
species
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 of wild
birds
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 in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom from 1970 to 2004.
Overall
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, the
shown
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apply
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graph shows that coastal
species
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 led the
index
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 of
species
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 numbers. The
population
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 of coastal
species
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 followed by all the
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birds
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bird
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species
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 that unsteadily increased every year.
In
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On
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other
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the other
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 hand, woodland and farmland
birds
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 kept drowning in low
index
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. In 1970, the
population
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 of coastal
species
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 started
in
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on
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 the border of
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index
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the index
an index
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, 100. The
index
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 measures 130
it
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which
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 means it experienced massive growth until it touched its highest level of
population
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.
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, all
species
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 of bird
doesn't
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don't
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 really show significant growth. All
species
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 only experienced unsteady
move
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movement
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 and peaked
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at its
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its
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their
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 largest amount of
population
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in
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at
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 around 110 in 1978. Woodland
species
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 experienced its largest
population
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 on
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index
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the index
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, measured
approximately
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at approximately
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 110 in 1976.
Unfortunately
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Unfortunately,
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 woodland
species
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continously
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continuously
 decreased until its lowest
index
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 at around 90. Farmland
species
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 placed as the lowest
population
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 of
birds
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 from the shown period, specifically in 2004 in
oly
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only
 reached around 55.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words species, birds, index, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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