The graph below shows the population figures of different types of wild birds in the one country between 1970 and 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the population figures of different types of wild birds in the one country between 1970 and 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The chart provides information about the numbers of three various
species
of wild
birds
in
United
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the United
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Kingdom from 1970 to 2004.
Overall
, the
shown
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apply
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graph shows that coastal
species
led the
index
of
species
numbers. The
population
of coastal
species
followed by all the
birds
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bird
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species
that unsteadily increased every year.
In
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On
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other
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the other
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hand, woodland and farmland
birds
kept drowning in low
index
. In 1970, the
population
of coastal
species
started
in
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on
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the border of
index
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the index
an index
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, 100. The
index
measures 130
it
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which
show examples
means it experienced massive growth until it touched its highest level of
population
.
Therefore
, all
species
of bird
doesn't
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don't
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really show significant growth. All
species
only experienced unsteady
move
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movement
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and peaked
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at its
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its
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their
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largest amount of
population
in
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at
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around 110 in 1978. Woodland
species
experienced its largest
population
on
index
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the index
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, measured
approximately
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at approximately
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110 in 1976.
Unfortunately
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Unfortunately,
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woodland
species
continously
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continuously
decreased until its lowest
index
at around 90. Farmland
species
placed as the lowest
population
of
birds
from the shown period, specifically in 2004 in
oly
Correct your spelling
only
reached around 55.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words species, birds, index, population with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.

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