The graph below shows the number of passenger railway journey made in Great Bristain between 1950 and 2004/5. Summarize the information by selecting and report the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart gives information about the quantity of passenger
trip
by the railway Fix the agreement mistake
trips
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ruined
runned
in Great Correct your spelling
run
Bristain
from 1950 to 2004/5.
It can be seen that all of Correct your spelling
Britain
National
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the National
rail
network
, London
Underground and Light rail
&
metro systems have an increasing trend between 1950 and 2004/5.
Speaking of National
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the National
rail
network
and London
Underground, during the period 1950
to 1983, Correct article usage
the London
National
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the National
rail
network
went up lightly in 1960 (from 1000 milions
to over 1100 Correct your spelling
million
milions
) and Correct your spelling
million
millions
then
it went down dramatically about
under 650 Change preposition
to about
milions
in 1983, Correct your spelling
million
while
London
Underground remained stable until 1975 after that it reduced to under 500 milions
in 1983. In the period 1983 to 2004/5, there Correct your spelling
million
were
an increase significantly in the number of National Correct subject-verb agreement
was
rail
network
and London
Underground, the former rose to over 1050 milions
and the latter rose to over 950 Correct your spelling
million
millions
milions
.
As regards Light Correct your spelling
million
millions
rail
& metro systems, It was Correct your spelling
ruined
runned
from about 1963 and in 1980 it
did not create any Correct your spelling
run
trip
. But after that, the Light Fix the agreement mistake
trips
rail
& metro systems increased remarkably to over 150 milions
.Correct your spelling
million
millions
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