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The graph below shows the number of passenger railway journey made in Great Bristain between 1950 and 2004/5. Summarize the information by selecting and report the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart gives information about the quantity of passenger
trip
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trips
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 by the railway
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ruined
runned
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run
 in Great
Bristain
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Britain
 from 1950 to 2004/5. It can be seen that all of
National
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the National
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rail
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network
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,
London
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 Underground and Light
rail
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 & metro systems have an increasing trend between 1950 and 2004/5. Speaking of
National
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the National
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rail
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network
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 and
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London
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the London
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 Underground, during the period 1950 to 1983,
National
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the National
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rail
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network
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 went up lightly in 1960 (from 1000
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milions
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million
 to over 1100
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milions
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million
millions
) and
then
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 it went down dramatically
about
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 under 650
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milions
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million
 in 1983,
while
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London
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 Underground remained stable until 1975 after that it reduced to under 500
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milions
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million
 in 1983. In the period 1983 to 2004/5, there
were
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was
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 an increase significantly in the number of National
rail
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network
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 and
London
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 Underground, the former rose to over 1050
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milions
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million
millions
 and the latter rose to over 950
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milions
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million
millions
. As regards Light
rail
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 & metro systems, It was
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ruined
runned
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run
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 from about 1963 and in 1980 it did not create any
trip
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trips
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. But after that, the Light
rail
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 & metro systems increased remarkably to over 150
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milions
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million
millions
.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rail, network, london, milions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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