The graph below shows the number of passenger railway journey made in Great Bristain between 1950 and 2004/5. Summarize the information by selecting and report the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart gives information about the quantity of passenger

trip

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trips

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by the railway

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ruined

runned

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run

in Great

Bristain

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Britain

from 1950 to 2004/5. It can be seen that all of

National

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the National

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rail

network

London

Underground and Light

rail

& metro systems have an increasing trend between 1950 and 2004/5. Speaking of

National

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the National

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rail

network

and

London

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the London

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Underground, during the period 1950 to 1983,

National

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the National

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rail

network

went up lightly in 1960 (from 1000

milions

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million

to over 1100

milions

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million

millions

) and

then

it went down dramatically

about

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under 650

milions

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million

in 1983,

while

London

Underground remained stable until 1975 after that it reduced to under 500

milions

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million

in 1983. In the period 1983 to 2004/5, there

were

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an increase significantly in the number of National

rail

network

and

London

Underground, the former rose to over 1050

milions

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million

millions

and the latter rose to over 950

milions

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million

millions

. As regards Light

rail

& metro systems, It was

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ruined

runned

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run

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from about 1963 and in 1980 it did not create any

trip

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trips

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. But after that, the Light

rail

& metro systems increased remarkably to over 150

milions

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million

millions

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