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The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The given illustration shows information about two types of tools in the stone era which had
function
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the function
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as
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of
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cutter
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cutters
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. As
it
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apply
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can be seen, there were two kinds of cutting
equipments
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equipment
 which were
tool
 A and
tool
 B which came from different massa and
they
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apply
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had different shapes.
To begin
 with,
the
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apply
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tool
 A,
it
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apply
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was a cutter made from rock and it had existed since 1.4 million years ago. The pictures of
tool
 A showed some
point
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points
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 of
views
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view
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, as
back
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the back
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 and front
view
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views
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 showed that the cutting tools' size was quite big and approximately the same shapes.
However
, from the side
view
, it was shown that the shape is thin and the top of it looked sight.
Then
, the next was
tool
 B,
it
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which
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 was made from stone and it came
from
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apply
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0.8 years ago.
This
 kind of cutting
tool
's shape that could be seen from
front
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the front
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 and
back
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the back
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view
 was bigger than
the
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apply
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tool
 A
while
 the side
view
 showed it was
thiner
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thinner
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 and its top sighter than
the
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apply
show examples
tool
 A.
Moreover
, both
of
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apply
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the
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apply
show examples
tool
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tools
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 A and B's
top
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tops
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 were 5cm.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tool, view with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Stone Age
  • tools
  • cutting
  • development
  • rudimentary
  • sophisticated
  • progression
  • unworked pebbles
  • flake tools
  • bifacial tools
  • efficiency
  • materials
  • emergence
  • characteristics
  • functionality
  • craftsmanship
  • precision
  • hunting
  • carving
  • advancements
  • significance
  • human development
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