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The map bellow show the chances that occurred to a town named Willington in 1780,1860 and 2000.

The map bellow show the chances that occurred to a town named Willington in 1780,1860 and 2000.
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 how
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land, which is called Willington, changed over 220
year-period
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years
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 from 1780 to 2000. There was considerable development of the settlement over these years and it was gradually
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transformed
 from a small rural village to a large town full of services. The most notable change is that roads were constructed and the number of homes was extended more than
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twice in
comaprison
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comparison
 to the
year
 1780 to reach almost 200 homes and 500 homes in the years 1860 and 2000 respectively.
However
,
this
 change caused to
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twice of the trees in the
year
 1860 that were planted in 1780.
Moreover
, the bridge over the river was built after the
year
 1780.
Also
, the farms were reduced to
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zero farms in the
year
 2000 which were replaced by
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educational and
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sport
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 services,
such
 as two schools and three
sport
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 fields.
In addition
, new shops were
arised
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 along the river and an amazing wetland for birds was built.
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