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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five autralia cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five autralia cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart delineates in Australia the proportion of individuals purchasing
of
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tea or
coffee
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 and drinking habits in five towns for
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last
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the last
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 4 weeks. In general, it is conspicuous that the most significant number of people
spent
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 their time
for
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having tea or
coffee
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 in
caffee
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coffee
caffeine
.
In contrast
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, buyers spending their money for consuming fresh
coffee
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 experienced the lowest in all cities. Turning to the towns having a high spread between the number of guests purchasing
coffee
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 or tea in
caffee
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coffee
 and two rest categories, the spreads’ Sydney and Melbourne dominated among others by around 15%.
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, the second position was instant
coffee
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 customers for both areas at approximately 45% for Sydney, followed by fresh
coffe
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coffee
 a few
bellow
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below
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, and just beyond 45% for Melbourne. As regards the rest of
categories
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the categories
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, in
Brisbande
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Brisbane
 and Adelaide, fresh
coffee
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 was the least popular compared to others by contributing around a third.
This
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 number was far beneath
from
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instant
coffee
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 and
cafee
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coffee
cafe
cafes
 guests at around well beyond 50% for Brisband and a half for Adelaide.
On the other hand
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, Hobart reported different
trend
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trends
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 with
consisting
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the same level of differences among all criteria.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • consumption
  • beverage
  • preference
  • compare
  • quantities
  • supermarkets
  • cafes
  • consume
  • patterns
  • notable
  • significant
  • trends
  • demographic
  • gender
  • habit
  • occasionally
  • frequently
  • cultural influence
  • workdays
  • weekends
  • paraphrase
  • analyze
  • summarize
  • draw conclusions
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