pie chart and table illustrate the various numbers of population in australia

pie chart and table illustrate the various numbers of population in australia
The pie chart and table report
Australian
different
populations
according to
various nationalities and areas.
Overall
, the highest population was
Australian
followed by others, and the lowest was
Dutch
.
However
, almost more than or equal to 89% of the
populations
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population
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had the highest density in the city, with the exception of
Australian
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Australians
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and
Dutch
.
To begin
,
Australian
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Australia
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was the highest nationality at 73% of the
populaiton
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population
. What is more, other
non-indentified
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non-identified
nationalities were the second highest at 14%.
On the other hand
, British, New Zealander, Chinese and
Dutch
populations
were the lowest in Australia, the former two had 7% and 3% each,
while
the latter two had 2% and 1%, respectively.
However
, the percentage of Chinese and New Zealander
populations
were
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the highest in the city, the first one at 99% and the second at 90%.
While
British,
Dutch
, and
Australian
had the lowest distribution in the city, at 89%, 83%, and 80% in the same order, respectively.
Conversely
,
most
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the most
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populated nationalities of the countryside were
Australian
at 20% and
Dutch
at 17% compared to only 11% for British.
While
,
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the lowest population density of countryside residents
were
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was
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for New
Zealander
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Zealanders
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at 10% and Chinese at 1%.
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