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Ambition is a positive quality for people to have in society today. How important is it for people who want to succeed in life? Is it a positive or negative characteristic?

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Everyone has their own ambitions for what they want to achieve in life,
thrive
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and thrive
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 in various sectors to reach their goals. It should be aware of that excessive worries to fulfil the desire that might be harmful.
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 issue.
On the other hand
,
people
concerned
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 about improving their lives
due to
people
 becoming more educated and
also
 there are a number of resources provided on the Internet. In order to succeed, it is genuinely important to make a daily schedule
,
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 and follow that schedule strictly.
To reach
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 the goal is genuinely important for not only fame and success but
also
 can improve self-esteem and confidence .
Also
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 it is beneficial to reach the top in career paths
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 and stand out at the highest level in society. The
last
 and least is that the goal-oriented person gets admiration among society and is inspired by
people
 who want to accomplish their desires.
On the other hand
,
due to
people
 eagerly wanting to succeed, they can harm or trouble themselves with unawareness.
For example
,
one
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if one
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 person wants to have an ambition to get an award in their department, they would like to show off their performance to be noticed by higher levels that gain pressure. As
consequence
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, they are not competing to achieve their goal but most likely conquer others.
Additionally
,
people
 may suffer pain
whereas
 compelling your abilities with others
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can decrease self-worth and morality.
To conclude
, it could not be possible to deny that ambition is a necessity for everyone to build as a valuable person in society. But there should be awareness not to focus on popularity and
overwhelm
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be overwhelmed
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 by pressure.
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