The map bellow show the chances that occurred to a town named Willington in 1780,1860 and 2000.

The map bellow show the chances that occurred to a town named Willington in 1780,1860 and 2000.
The map compares the transformations made in the town of Willington in the years 1780, 1860 and 2000. Generally speaking, the area of the town witnessed dramatic changes, including the removal of vegetation in order to establish educational buildings,
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the espansion
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espansion
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expansion
of accommodations and
introduction
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the introduction
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of stores.
To begin
, in 1780, a farm and woods took the main area of the town, with only 100 homes located on the
nortern-eastern
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north-eastern
side.
However
, in 1860 and 2000, the bridge was established, so that
sitizens
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citizens
could cross the river.
Additionally
, a farm and forest
was
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still kept, in 1860, but removed later in 2000, replacing these areas with schools and another main road Looking at the north side of the map, the river and the shops along it
leaded
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led
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to the wetland for birds.
Furthermore
, as the number of facilities
had
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increased, there was constructed more houses for living, starting from 100 to 200 (from 1780 to 1860)
reaching
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and reaching
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500 homes in 2000.
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