The map bellow show the chances that occurred to a town named Willington in 1780,1860 and 2000.
The map compares the transformations made in the town of Willington in the years 1780, 1860 and 2000.
Generally speaking, the area of the town witnessed dramatic changes, including the removal of vegetation in order to establish educational buildings,
Correct article usage
the espansion
espansion
of accommodations and Correct your spelling
expansion
introduction
of stores.
Correct article usage
the introduction
To begin
, in 1780, a farm and woods took the main area of the town, with only 100 homes located on the nortern-eastern
side. Correct your spelling
north-eastern
However
, in 1860 and 2000, the bridge was established, so that sitizens
could cross the river. Correct your spelling
citizens
Additionally
, a farm and forest was
still kept, in 1860, but removed later in 2000, replacing these areas with schools and another main road
Looking at the north side of the map, the river and the shops along it Correct subject-verb agreement
were
leaded
to the wetland for birds. Correct your spelling
led
Furthermore
, as the number of facilities had
increased, there was constructed more houses for living, starting from 100 to 200 (from 1780 to 1860) Unnecessary verb
apply
reaching
500 homes in 2000.Correct word choice
and reaching
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