The chart below shows the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line charts give us information about the usage of electrical
equipments
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equipment
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in the families
along with
the weekly duration of house activities, commencing 1920 to 2019.
Overall
, the usage of washing
machine
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machines
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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, and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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among the families
were
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increased, compared to the housework activities’ amount of hours, which had its downfall in each year. In the first chart, more than
a
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half of the households were 20 years late to use
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the refrigerator
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refrigerator
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refrigerators
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,
subsequently
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the rates climbed
for
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more than 40% in 1960. From 1980 up to 2019,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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can be seen in almost every
households
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. In comparison,
in
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1920 to 1940, the remained categories
were experiencing
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a similar trend.
However
, in 1960,
while
vacuum
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the vacuum
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cleaner had a steady growth, hitting its highest point of about 100% in the 2000s, the washing machine had its downfall. People tend to less owning
a
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washing
machine
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machines
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in their houses, receding its number by about 70% to 60% in 1980, but
fortunately
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it resurganced in 2019, with figures almost 80%.
On the other hand
, in spite of its increase in those electrical
equipments
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, the duration
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using those materials collapsed throughout the entire
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. In 1920, families managed to do their home activities
around
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50 hours and
then
the number receded significantly by about 30% in 1960. By the end of the period, it was very rare
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households to do their home activities, approximately only 10%.
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