The map below shows two possible sites (s1 and s2) of a new supermarket planned for the town of GARLSDON

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This

is the

overall

map of Garlsdon

town

where

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which

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become

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became

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the place of supermarket construction

held in

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apply

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. With

general

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a general

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overview, the countryside

where

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that

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become

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becomes

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the S1 looks

dominating

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to dominate

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the outer place and

have

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bigger

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a bigger

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area than the S2 or the

town

centre

However

, there are several reasons why the

town

centre

has

higher

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a higher

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chance for

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the supermarket

a supermarket

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supermarket

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supermarkets

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to be

suceessful

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successful

. First and foremost,

town

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the town

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centre

has no traffic zone even though it is being circled by industry. In fact, it will be easier to supply things for the supermarket as the industry

become

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the distributor later on. The

town

centre

population is

also

higher than most of the area around it, which has 65.000 individuals in comparison of total 54.000

citizen

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from Crandson, Bransdon, and Hindon.

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

128 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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The map below shows two possible sites (s1 and s2) of a new supermarket planned for the town of GARLSDON

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Nowadays more people are living by themselves. What are the reasons for this? Will this have a negative or a positive impact on the society?

Some people say that wild animals have no place in the 21st century, and the protection is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It has been suggested that cars and public transport should be banned from city centres and only bicycles be allowed instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarize the information by selecting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.