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The map below shows two possible sites (s1 and s2) of a new supermarket planned for the town of GARLSDON

The map below shows two possible sites (s1 and s2) of a new supermarket planned for the town of GARLSDON
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This
 is the
overall
 map of Garlsdon
town
where
Correct word choice
which
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become
Wrong verb form
became
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 the place of supermarket construction
held in
Verb problem
apply
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. With
general
Correct article usage
a general
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 overview, the countryside
where
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that
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become
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becomes
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 the S1 looks
dominating
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to dominate
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 the outer place and
have
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has
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bigger
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a bigger
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 area than the S2 or the
town
centre
.
However
, there are several reasons why the
town
centre
 has
higher
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a higher
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 chance for
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the supermarket
a supermarket
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supermarket
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supermarkets
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 to be
suceessful
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successful
. First and foremost,
town
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the town
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centre
 has no traffic zone even though it is being circled by industry. In fact, it will be easier to supply things for the supermarket as the industry
become
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becomes
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 the distributor later on. The
town
centre
 population is
also
 higher than most of the area around it, which has 65.000 individuals in comparison of total 54.000
citizen
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citizens
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 from Crandson, Bransdon, and Hindon.
To sum up
,
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proposed
  • relative to
  • proximity
  • accessibility
  • impact
  • community
  • contrast
  • access
  • benefits
  • drawbacks
  • congestion
  • infrastructure
  • economic growth
  • reflection
  • environmental concerns
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