The map below shows two possible sites (s1 and s2) of a new supermarket planned for the town of GARLSDON

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map of Garlsdon

town

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where

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become

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the place of supermarket construction

held in

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apply

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. With

general

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overview, the countryside

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become

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the S1 looks

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the outer place and

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bigger

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area than the S2 or the

town

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centre

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, there are several reasons why the

town

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centre

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higher

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chance for

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the supermarket

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supermarket

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supermarkets

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to be

suceessful

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successful

. First and foremost,

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town

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the town

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centre

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has no traffic zone even though it is being circled by industry. In fact, it will be easier to supply things for the supermarket as the industry

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the distributor later on. The

town

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centre

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population is

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higher than most of the area around it, which has 65.000 individuals in comparison of total 54.000

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from Crandson, Bransdon, and Hindon.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

128 words

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proposed
relative to
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accessibility
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The map below shows two possible sites (s1 and s2) of a new supermarket planned for the town of GARLSDON

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Advertising are becoming more and more common in everyday life. Is it a positive or negative development ?

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Some people say that the main aim of advertising is to improve the sales of products that people do not really need. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?