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The advantages of the spread of English as a global language will continue to outweigh its disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is a notion that the globalization of
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language
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are
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 giving more benefits than its drawbacks. I completely agree with the view and
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discuss
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an endemic tools
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 for speaking already make
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communication
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 easier. Probably, because
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 have the simplest form of understandable basic words, which
people
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 to go to formal
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. Take
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 example of several waitress in Japan who communicate with mediocre
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 in
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english
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 influence the
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educational
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 sector as well. Notably,
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tools
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 already heightened the opportunity for
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 who want to study abroad. It can be seen through several universities which already
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 programmes or subjects for individuals who want to undertake their
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 in another country.
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,
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 as the universal
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 can make the learning process more effective, because there are no barriers
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, it is inevitable that several drawbacks might follow the popularity of the
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language
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 mastering
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, the
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 can slowly
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 authenticity. In the past,
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 used to
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 that
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Western society. With the spike sign that
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 can diminish
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's natural ability toward
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language
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. As a global
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tools
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,
people
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 will frequently speak in
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 it makes them start to forget the original
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 that they already
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 since born.
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, Indonesian
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 who used to interact in
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 will start to forget several Indonesian words.
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 the popularity of
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 can make the
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 and influence
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's natural ability toward
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, the widespread from it surely
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a detrimental effects
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a detrimental effect
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 on the economic and educational sectors.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea that is expanded upon with relevant examples. Aim for logical transitions between sentences and ideas for better flow.
coherence cohesion
Fully respond to all parts of the task by providing a clear opinion and supporting it with a balanced discussion of arguments for and against, including examples. Avoid repetition of ideas and strive for a variety of sentence structures.
task achievement
Make sure to address the prompt fully, developing a position that is well-supported by relevant examples and arguments, showing a clear understanding of the topic. Your conclusion should reflect a summary of your points and restate your position effectively.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • global language
  • lingua franca
  • communication
  • employment opportunities
  • economic growth
  • cultural exchange
  • knowledge sharing
  • education
  • travel
  • linguistic diversity
  • cultural imperialism
  • linguistic imperialism
  • colonization
  • identity
  • language preservation
  • cultural heritage
  • mutual understanding
  • intercultural relationships
  • linguistic barriers
  • disadvantaged communities
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