The line charts give information about the demand for steel and number of workers employed in a country from January to December.

The line charts give information about the demand for steel and number of workers employed in a country from January to December.
The charts above depict the
number
of employees and the actual demand for
steel
from January to December
in
particular
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a particular
the particular
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country. The demand for
steel
fluctuated
along
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the
year
while
the
number
of workers constantly declined until the end of the
year
. In detail, commencing the
year
, the
steel
required arose to 3000 million tonnes which was the highest
number
during the
year
. After that, it fluctuated from April to August,
then
fell to the bottom before December.
Thereafter
it went up to 2000 million tonnes
in
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the end of the
year
. On the other side, the
number
of workers employed in
steel
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industry increased from January to February, before dropping to 3000 thousand people in March, and remained the same numbers until May.
Moreover
, it went up and down before steadily decreasing until December to 1000 thousand people.
Overall
, the demand for
steel
and the workers employed had the same pattern
that is
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decreasing over the
year
.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, steel, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Demand
  • Employment
  • Industry
  • Fluctuation
  • Trend
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Correspond
  • External factors
  • Steel industry
  • Workforce
  • Economy
  • Planning
  • Forecast
  • Data Interpretation
  • Monthly Analysis
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