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Increasing travels between countries enable people to learn about different cultures, or to increase tension between people from different countries? discuss both views.

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People have different views about the increasing number of international travel. From my perspective, there will be a mutual effect between going through sorts of cultures and increasing burden in other countries. People have different views about the increasing number of international travel. From my perspective, there will be a mutual effect between going through sorts of cultures and increasing burden in other countries. People have different views about the increasing number of international travel. From my perspective, there will be a mutual effect between going through sorts of cultures and increasing burden in other countries.
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Address all parts of the task by discussing both views presented in the question and providing your own opinion.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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