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In today's world many people own a smartphone. Do you think the advantages of owning a smartphone outweiht the disadvantages?

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In the modern era,
smartphones
 have become a part of our lives and bring lots of convenience.
This
 author believes that the benefits of
access to
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accessing
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information
 easily and bringing entertainment to everyone through the smartphone can exceed the disadvantages of distraction at work.
Firstly
,
information
 is very critical nowadays, and
smartphones
 can provide access to a vast amount of
information
 via the Internet. Users can research, read news and learn new skills through browsers.
For instance
, 90% of people nowadays use GOOGLE to search for
information
 on
this
 browser,
brings
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which brings
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 lots of income for
this
 company. Another advantage is gives individuals various ways to entertain themselves. Entertainment has a big impact on human life, and
smartphones
 can offer a range of entertainment options,
such
 as streaming, listening to music and reading e-books.
As a result
, more and more people own a smartphone to find a way to entertain themselves after a hard working day.
However
, the drawback of using technology
such
 as
smartphones
 can be noticed as a distraction from work.
Although
 it can bring various
information
 for individuals, we can be distracted from work because there are lot of
information
 on the Internet and we want to explore them all, which may contribute to social isolation when they replace face-to-face interaction. In conclusion, the advantages can outweigh the drawbacks in every field and need to be developed more.
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