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The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with data opened, kilometers of route and passenger numbers per year in millions.

The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with data opened, kilometers of route and passenger numbers per year in millions.
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information about underground
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 systems in six major cities with
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the date
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 opened, kilometres of
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 and passengers per year in millions. In general , it is clear from the table that the
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 system in Tokyo
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 highest trend in 1927 at about 1927 passengers in millions per year.
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 what was shown in the table, the
railway
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 system in London opened in 1863 and the kilometres of route in it
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most
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 popular than other cities at about 394 with 775 in millions per year.
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 , the system of
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 in Kyoto was the lowest popular about 11
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 and it opened in 1981.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words railway with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underground railway systems
  • kilometers of route
  • passenger numbers per year
  • millions
  • significance
  • historical context
  • correlate
  • infrastructure
  • efficiency
  • tourist traffic
  • correlation analysis
  • investment
  • municipal
  • expanding
  • usage
  • trends
  • observed
  • impact
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