The table and pie chart gives information about the population in Australia according to different nationalities and areas.

The table and pie chart gives information about the population in Australia according to different nationalities and areas.
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Contained in two charts are data on Australia’s
population
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which were based on dissimilar nationalities and zones. Generally speaking, most of the
population
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was Australian.
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, the percentage of residents in Australia who lived in urban areas outnumbered rural areas. Beginning with the
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in Australia, the highest figure was Australian recorded at 73%,
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the lowest was Dutch stood at 1%, making
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a significant difference. With respect to the others and British, their proportion accounted for 14% and 7%, respectively, closely followed by the Chinese with a lower
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of 2%. Turning to the table, the considerable difference was in Chinese whose
population
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in cities outnumbered
countryside
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the countryside
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at 99% and 1%, in that order. With regard to Australian, British and New
Zealander
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Zealanders
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, their figures for cities ranged from 80% to 90%,
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countryside
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the countryside
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ranged from 10% to 20%. Below
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level was the Dutch whose data of urban areas made up 83%,
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the rural ones hit 17%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic data
  • population distribution
  • nationality groups
  • urban planning
  • cultural diversity
  • social policy
  • demographic trends
  • rural vs. urban distribution
  • reflect on the implications
  • cultural exchange
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