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The process showing how drinkable water is produced using solar power.

#process #water #power
The provided diagram vividly
illustartes
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illustrates
 the way in which fresh and drinking
water
 is prepared via renewable solar energy.
Overall
, it is clearly observable that the whole process consists of 5 distinct stages, commencing with absorption of sunlight and culminating with pouring pure
water
 into a portable container. To
beging
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begin
 with, the solar
pannel
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panel
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absorb
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absorbs
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 sunlight and
convert
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 it to energy. In the subsequent stage, the power
go
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throught
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through
 the control process by the solar controller. Prior to the transformation of
water
 into the filtering system, the electricity should be sent into a device which
enable
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 the
water
 to go to the next step. With regard to the purification
peocess
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process
 itself, impure
water
 undergoes 3 stages of
filteration
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filtration
 and
then
 is poured
in
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 a big container which is situated on a wooden platform.
Finally
, fresh
water
 is
collcted
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collected
to
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 a smaller moveable container by tap.
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Spelling
Be cautious with spelling errors such as 'illustartes', 'beging', 'pannel', 'throught', 'go', 'peocess', 'filteration', and 'collcted'. These detract from the overall quality of your writing and can affect your score negatively.
Structure
Ensure you have a clear introductory paragraph and a definite concluding paragraph to frame your essay effectively. These elements are essential for achieving a high band score in coherence and cohesion.
Coherence
Make sure that each paragraph has a clear central theme and that all sentences within each paragraph smoothly connect to each other and to this central theme. This will help in achieving a logical flow throughout your essay.
Detail
Support your main points with specific examples or details to score higher in task achievement. In a process description, this could involve more precise measurements, durations, or explanations of each step's significance.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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