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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
The pie chart below illustrates the type of
employment
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 that learners of Anthropology do after their tertiary school
whereas
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, the table shows the income that they received during a period of five years.
Overall
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,The graduates who got Full-time
work
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 were just over half the total number of students who graduated.
Moreover
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,a tiny
minority
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 got
employment
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 under Part-time
work
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 + postgraduate study.
In contrast
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, people who provided services in the government sector received the highest wages. College students who got Full-time
work
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 were just over a half and
this
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 was the highest recording.Again, people who were part-time workers were a small
minority
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.
Additionally
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, the Part-time
work
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 postgrad study and those without
employment
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also
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, not known
as well as
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 Full-time postgrad study had an insignificant
minority
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.
Besides
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, Freelance consultants government sector and private companies had an insignificant
minority
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 that received income that was $49,999 and less whilst,the people who had salaries that were above $100,000 were more than a third in every type of
employment
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words employment, work, minority with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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