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The line charts detail the percentage of households per week with three different electrical appliances from 1920 to 2019. Looking from an

overall

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perspective, it is readily apparent that the proportion of washing

machine

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refrigerator

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, and

vaccum

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vacuum

cleaner

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have a rising trend over the given years.

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with, the washing Machine

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started from the lowest portion in 1920 and

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increased to 100 in 1980 and

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remained

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. As can be seen, the refrigerator had the same pattern from 30 to 100, in 1920 till 2000 respectively and

then

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have

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had a steady trend.

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, the vacuum cleaner

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1960 increased slowly and

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fluctuated over 20 years ahead and again started to grow gradually.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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The charts below show the he changes in ownership

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.

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