The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
The graph illustrates the proportion of the population in 4 special Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 20
years
.
Overall
, it can be seen that
,
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the share of all four countries witnessed an
incease
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decrease
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graduall
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gradually
gradual
over the 30
years
and
this
fegure
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figure
, will
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a minute growth over the following 20
years
as well.
Initially
, the population of Indonesia
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minimally
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increased from around 12% to 60% over the period of time,
while
the proportion of Thailand in the first 2
decadec
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decades
experienced a gradual drop, and in the following 30
years
remained the same, but in the
last
2 decades will saw a small dip from 30% to 50%.
According to
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2
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, the percentage of Malaysia rapidly
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by 50% (from 30% to 80%) over the period of time,
whereas
that of
Philippines
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initially
fluctuated between 30% and 50%, and in the
last
4 decades witnessed an
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increase
gradual by approximately 15%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.

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