You participated in a public event organized at a local park. Write a letter to the event organizer. In your letter tell them some feedback about the event; explain what you particularly enjoyed; give some suggestions for improvement.

Dear grandmother The purpose of my writing to you is to apologize for not being able to contact you earlier. The reason is that I have been busy with classes lately,
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have been a number of tests. There were extra classes even on weekends. I couldn't contact you and other family members for a long time. I couldn't even go home. I will be in front of you in a few days.I want to meet you on January 15. I look forward to meeting you. I will wait for your answer. You are the best and most precious person for me. Your beloved grandson Dilorom
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task achievement
Ensure you address all parts of the task given: providing feedback on the event, detailing what you enjoyed, and offering suggestions for improvement. The letter submitted did not address the task as it was more of a personal letter to a family member rather than to an event organizer about a public event.
coherence cohesion
To improve logical structure, organize the letter with an appropriate greeting related to the context and clear, purposeful paragraphs. Each paragraph should ideally represent a single, coherent idea. The provided letter did not follow the structure of an event feedback letter.
coherence cohesion
Start with a proper greeting to the event organizer and end with an appropriate closing statement for a formal letter. The letter provided did not have a suitable greeting or closing for the context of writing to an event organizer.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • event organizer
  • public event
  • local park
  • feedback
  • organized
  • community engagement
  • performances
  • logistical
  • facilities
  • crowd management
  • inclusivity
  • local businesses
  • atmosphere
  • volunteer
  • memorable
  • suggestions for improvement
  • upcoming events
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