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The charts below give information about the price of tickets on one airline between Sydney and Melbourne, Australia, over a two-week period in 2013.

The charts below give information about the price of tickets on one airline between Sydney and Melbourne, Australia, over a two-week period in 2013.
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The bar charts display information for the price of airline tickets from Sydney to Melbourne and the reverse flight over a
two
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week
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 period in 2013. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that
flights
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 in both directions displayed broadly similar patterns with higher
prices
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Friday
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 through
Monday
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. Compared to
week
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 1,
week
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 2
prices
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 were either greatly deflated or identical for nearly all
flights
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. In
week
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 1,
flights
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 from Sydney to Melbourne started at 80$ on
Monday
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,
were
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 all under $40 over the next 3 days before a spike to $75, $70, and $50 on
Friday
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, Saturday and Sunday, respectively. During the second
week
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, the
prices
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 were unchanged with the notable exception of a decline on
Monday
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 to $50 fares. In terms of
flights
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 from Melbourne to Sydney, the trend was comparable with
flights
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 on
Monday
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 of
week
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 1 elevated to $60, sub-$40
flights
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 on Tuesday, Wednesday, and Thursday and the most expensive flight on
Friday
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 at $80.
Flights
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 on Saturday and Sunday were
also
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 relatively costly at $60 and $50 each day. In
week
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 2,
Monday
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prices
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 displayed a dramatic decline to $40 and there was more variance later in the
week
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.
Friday
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 fell to $50 and Saturday to $50. All other tickets remained the same in
week
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 2.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words week, flights, prices, friday, monday with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "display" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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