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There are several advantages to hosting an international sporting event. There are disadvantages too. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

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There are numerous advantages of being a host of the International sporting agenda. Not only that, there is a bad effect conducting that event as well. In
this
 essay I will elaborate my both points of view,
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 I declare my state in the
last
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. the advantage of hosting an international sporting event is bringing many
people
 from around the world to the country.
As a result
, the nation will get a lot of money, which can lead to an increase in local income.
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,
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people
 can sell many products which can be bought by tourists who become supporters. It
also
 promotes the local crafts and makes them become more popular.
On the other hand
, the international agenda sometimes has a social effect on society
such
 as low awareness of a traditional culture. The
foreigner
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 come and bring
the
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different habits,
for instance
, the way they wear clothes. The traditional
cloth
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 will be left by the local
people
 and
then
 they try to copy what tourists wear. If they do it continuously, the traditional clothes will
be disappear
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, and It
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 to
loss
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 of their identity. To summarize, I believe that conducting an international agenda can improve the salary of the local
people
, but it can erase the identity of the culture. By concerning
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the bad effect, actually, we can protect the local culture by keeping the awareness of cultural values and protecting it with a promotion in the international event.
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task response
Ensure the introduction clearly presents the topic and outlines the structure of the essay. Your conclusion should summarise your key points and reiterate your overall opinion.
coherence cohesion
Structure your essay with clear paragraphs, each containing a main idea and supporting sentences. Use cohesive devices to connect ideas and ensure smooth transitions between paragraphs.
task response
Include specific examples to support your points, ensuring they are directly relevant to the topic.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global spotlight
  • economic surge
  • cultural exchange
  • infrastructural advancements
  • public health
  • national identity
  • fiscal burden
  • environmental footprint
  • security protocols
  • political maneuvering
  • sustainable planning
  • legacy projects
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