Some people believe that the experiences children have before they go to school will have the greatest effect on their future life. Others argue that experiences gained when they are teenagers have a bigger influence. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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some individuals claim that Linking Words
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until the Use synonyms
age
of 7 years old influences people most of all, others, Use synonyms
however
, believe that the school years are the most influential period of Linking Words
life
, which brings a significant effect, which I firmly agree with.
On the one hand, the early period of Use synonyms
life
is quite important in terms of individual shaping. Use synonyms
Firstly
, self-estimation, which determines Linking Words
such
things as self-confidence can be formed only at a young Linking Words
age
. Use synonyms
The stable
self-confidence helps to take complicated acts and lead them to the end. Correct article usage
Stable
Therefore
, self-confidence is closely correlated with Linking Words
life
success. Use synonyms
As a result
, psychological stability and trust in the world grow at a young Linking Words
age
as well. Use synonyms
Secondly
, the model of family relationships can be discovered at an early Linking Words
age
. Use synonyms
This
model child carries through the whole Linking Words
life
and personal happiness will be determined by Use synonyms
this
child's experience.
Despite the importance of childhood experience, I see that the Linking Words
youthful
is a more important period of Replace the word
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life
. Use synonyms
Firstly
, at the adolescent Linking Words
age
person learns how to make decisions. Use synonyms
Moreover
, every action has consequences, which is why Linking Words
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the juvenal
juvenal
uses to take personal responsibility for maiden decisions. Correct your spelling
juvenile
In other words
, teenager prepares to cope with difficulties in an adult Linking Words
life
. Use synonyms
Secondly
, Linking Words
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at
this
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age
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Add a comma
,
For example
, if the correct decision wasn't made exactly at Linking Words
this
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age
, a person would never be able to be a doctor or a good programmer. Use synonyms
That is
why the Linking Words
age
from 12 to 18 has the greatest impact in terms of personal destiny.
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To sum up
, Linking Words
while
some people insist that there is nothing more important than childhood in a perspective of influence on a future Linking Words
life
, Use synonyms
it is clear that
the most significant things in terms of Linking Words
life
impact, Use synonyms
such
as personal responsibility, decision making and skills-training can be obtained only in adolescence.Linking Words
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