The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reportung the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The  diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reportung the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps demonstrate the layout of the central
library
20 years ago and at the present, after some changes have been made.
Overall
, the
library
has experienced significant moderation, with more space dedicated
for
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events and improved facilities for visitors.
Firstly
, the room which housed CDs, videos and computer games 20 years ago has been
substaintially
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substantially
enlarged and now stores children's fiction
books
. Sofas have
also
been provided for comfort and for storytelling events. Adult fiction
books
have been relocated to the other side of the
library
, making
place
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a place
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for all the contemporary reference
books
.
Additionally
, the reading room which once
sit
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in the right corner of the
library
are
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is
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now utilized for people who need to use the computers. There have
also
been some changes in the
library
's leisure facilities. First and foremost, the tables and chairs which were previously in the middle of the map have been removed. On the right side of the
library
, an information desk and some self-service machines have been erected.
Finally
, there is a cafe where an enquiry desk which
sold
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tickets,
receive
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borrowed
books
used to be.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words library, books with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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