The internet will never replace traditional course books in schools. How far do you agree with this prediction?

Nowadays, everybody is using
internet
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everywhere, every
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and every time. Some believe that artificial intelligence will retake conventional
books
in schools
while
others do not believe so. I partially agree with
this
statement in
this
essay. First of all, by improving technology, the government and
organization
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organizations
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want to substitute e-
books
instead
of traditional lesson
books
in learning processes, especially in schools.
As a result
, students do not need to bring printed
books
when they go to the classroom.
Moreover
, some resources for continuous assessments and
syllabus
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can
easy
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browse
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on the internet,
that
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can support
to get
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a
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great academic achievement.
For example
, most developed countries are currently applying distance learning in
the
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higher education for some people who are unable to attend
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the
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campus.
Furthermore
,
by
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replacing the internet in schools,
it
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can change the way
of
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teacher-led lessons and
rote-learning
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.
However
, it can affect undergraduates’ health problems
such
as low vision and eye disorders because of watching the screen for a long time.
Additionally
, some sources from the websites are not reliable
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knowledge.
For instance
, numerous websites on the web
browser’s
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facts are not accurate and
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thesis
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. In conclusion, the net will be substituted
instead
of printed
books
in one day, if the government and organization support
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and certain
type
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of systems.
Consequently
, learners get a lot of benefits from those kinds of materials.
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