The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from.
The chart given examines the graphic of the total overseas
citizen
who came to Australia, Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
while
the table explains the number of the
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visitor
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visitors
countries
originally. Both of Change preposition
to countries
data
compares the same Correct article usage
the data
years
, which are in 1975 and 2005.
Based on the chart, there is one thing that pops up the most where there was a significant increase in 30 years
. It was started in 1975, or the lowest number, where
there were only 10 Correct word choice
when
million
of
individuals Change preposition
apply
came
to Australia. Correct pronoun usage
who came
Furthermore
in
10 Change preposition
apply
years
later, which is 1985, there was
approximately 15 Change the verb form
were
million
residents came
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who came
and
followed Correct word choice
apply
with
almost 10 more Change preposition
by
million
citizen
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citizens
came
in 1995. More than that, the data Correct pronoun usage
who came
is
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apply
also
stated its peak in 2005 where
there were 30 Correct word choice
when
million
of
people Change preposition
apply
visit
the region.
Regarding Wrong verb form
visiting
from
the table, most of the population Change preposition
apply
were
likely came from the Unnecessary verb
apply
east
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East
asia
countries for both Correct your spelling
Asian
years
. The topmost visitor
for each Fix the agreement mistake
visitors
years
were coming from Japan with 12 Change to a singular noun
year
million
visitors in 2005 and 3.2 million
in the earlier
year. Correct word choice
previous
Moreover
, South Korea
individuals were Correct your spelling
Korean
in
the second highest where the total number of residents for both Change preposition
at
years
were
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was
in
2.9 and 91. Change preposition
apply
million
. However
, when most of the numbers were more than twofold of
differences, Change preposition
apply
population
of China only showed Add an article
the population
0.5
contrast between 1975 and 2005.Correct article usage
a 0.5
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