The diagram below shows a life cycle of a honey bee. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the
honey
bee's life cycle from eggs
to maturity.
Overall
, honey
bee has an average lifespan of 34 to 36 days
and their life cycle consists of four main stages: eggs
, nymph, young adult, and adult.
Honey
bees
start their lives as eggs
. The cycle begins when one or two honey
bee eggs
are laid by females every three days
. After approximately 9 to 10 days
, the eggs
hatch and become nymphs, which is the first form of bees
. They can moult three times as they mature with the first one occurring 5 days
after hatching, then
followed by 7 days
after that, and the last
happening for 9 days
.
Next,
they develop into young adult bees
which have bigger sizes than the nymphs and stripes emerge from their body. After four days
, they grow into mature bees
which are much larger and can produce eggs
. Finally
, the females
Change the noun form
female
bees
will continue to lay the eggs
and the entire journey is repeated all over again.Submitted by ieltswriting91 on
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