The diagram below shows a life cycle of a honey bee. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows a life cycle of a honey bee. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the
honey
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bee's life cycle from
eggs
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to maturity.
Overall
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,
honey
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bee has an average lifespan of 34 to 36
days
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and their life cycle consists of four main stages:
eggs
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, nymph, young adult, and adult.
Honey
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bees
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start their lives as
eggs
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. The cycle begins when one or two
honey
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bee
eggs
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are laid by females every three
days
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. After approximately 9 to 10
days
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, the
eggs
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hatch and become nymphs, which is the first form of
bees
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. They can moult three times as they mature with the first one occurring 5
days
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after hatching,
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followed by 7
days
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after that, and the
last
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happening for 9
days
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.
Next,
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they develop into young adult
bees
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which have bigger sizes than the nymphs and stripes emerge from their body. After four
days
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, they grow into mature
bees
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which are much larger and can produce
eggs
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.
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, the
females
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female
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bees
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will continue to lay the
eggs
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and the entire journey is repeated all over again.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words honey, eggs, days, bees with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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