You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The tables below show people's reasons for giving up smoking, and when they intend to give up. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The tables below show people's reasons for giving up smoking, and when they intend to give up.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
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The depicted table enumerates the percentage of people's reasons
to give
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for giving
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up smoking and
in
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apply
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which
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their
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age it will be.
Overall
, it is evident that the majority of people intend to give up to have better health in general within half a year's time.
Moreover
, the majority of quitters smoke fewer than ten cigars a day. As can be seen, in the pie chart the
use
of four different types of transport varies considerably. The
use
of cars constitutes just under one-half (45%). The
use
of LRT (light rail transit) accounts for a little more than one-third (35%).
However
, the pattern is the complete reverse when it comes to bus and taxi usage roughly ten per cent for each of them. Approximately one-half (50%) of people who
use
the car in the city commute to work. Shopping and leisure activities are almost the same, almost a small minority (15%). Taking children to school and business represent forty per cent and nearly a half (45%) respectively.
Overall
, the wagon is the primary means of transportation for Edmonton’s citizens, the transit is more popular among them than buses and taxis.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words use with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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