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The line graph gives the details of changing modules of local access to contemporary technology in the UK between the years of 1996 to 2003.

The line graph gives the details of changing modules of local access to contemporary technology in the UK between the years of 1996 to 2003.
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The given
line
 chart depicts the percentage of UK access to four contemporaneous technology concepts from 1996 to 2003. Looking at the
overall
 perspective, it is apparent that the widely used device over the studied
period
 was
CD
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a CD
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 player.
Also
, the Mobile phone overtook the Home computer and was ranked second in the
last
period
. In general, all modules witnessed an upward trend over the given
period
. With regard to the most popular module, the
line
 of CD players started at 60
percent
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per cent
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 in 1996 and after a steady increase, peaked at just above 80 per cent in 2003.
Likewise
, Mobile phone
users
 began from the third most popular technological module with
the
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 value of 20
percent
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 in 1996 and after overtaking the
line
 of Home computer
users
 in 1999, it became the second most used module in 2003, at 70
percent
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per cent
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.
On the other hand
, Home computer
users
 increased from 30
percent
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per cent
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 at the start of
period
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the period
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 to just above 50
percent
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per cent
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 which was ranked third.
Also
, the chart started for internet access
from
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 1998 and
this
 technology attracted
users
 so that the
line
 saw a slight growth from 10
percent
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per cent
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 at the beginning to 45
percent
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per cent
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 in the
last
 year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words line, period, percent, users with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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