It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

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when we can
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to take a
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of doing it
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disadvantages
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. At
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experience. Taking
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shows
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new
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of solving problems or achieving goals in
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and personal
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we learn something that can help us in future,
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if you
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your problems worse, at least you will get some experience and you will know where you had
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and what you should change in your way to achieve your goal or solve
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.
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second,
we can learn how to prepare for one goal through
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to think about it and try to find
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efficient way. If they do
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professional circumstances, they will recognize the responsibility and importance of cooperation.
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, as I mentioned taking
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can have some drawbacks, but for me
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outweigh them, because by it we learn something,
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goals and problems by knowing or thinking how better, faster and with less effort achieve or solve them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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