Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Many
community
believe that the government should spend money on railways rather than roads. I Change to a plural noun
communities
differ
with Verb problem
disagree
this
contention completely for some reasons. My position is argued further
with the explanation.
Out of all the reasons the foremost one is harbor
are very common and connect with local areas, towns, cities and Fix the agreement mistake
harbors
as well as
with states. Along
with
, Correct pronoun usage
with this
public
can easily reach their destination if Add an article
the public
seaport
are well maintained by the law or leaders. To add to Correct article usage
the seaport
this
public transport will increase to help people to reach them on time. Additionally
, road travelling
is less expensive rather than air and train. Replace the word
travel
This
is because society can use their own vehicles to travel on wharf
.
Add an article
the wharf
Moreover
, if the government only work on railway tracks then
population
have less choice to travel because if someone wants to go office Correct article usage
the population
that is
5 km away from his home, and the railway station is 10km away, he will not prefer train
to reach work. Add an article
the train
Besides
this
, railway tracks would be expensive to make.
To conclude
, and give my opinion, I would say that roads are very important to survive in daily routine, and ministry
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the ministry
need
to focus on Change the verb form
needs
maintain
and Wrong verb form
maintaining
work
on timely.Wrong verb form
working
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