IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 2.5

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Many
community
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communities
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 believe that the government should spend money on railways rather than roads. I
differ
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disagree
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 with
this
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 contention completely for some reasons. My position is argued
further
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 with the explanation. Out of all the reasons the foremost one is
harbor
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harbors
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 are very common and connect with local areas, towns, cities and
as well as
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 with states.
Along
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with
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with this
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,
public
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the public
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 can easily reach their destination if
seaport
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the seaport
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 are well maintained by the law or leaders. To add to
this
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 public transport will increase to help people to reach them on time.
Additionally
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, road
travelling
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travel
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 is less expensive rather than air and train.
This
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 is because society can use their own vehicles to travel on
wharf
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the wharf
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.
Moreover
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, if the government only work on railway tracks
then
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population
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the population
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 have less choice to travel because if someone wants to go office
that is
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 5 km away from his home, and the railway station is 10km away, he will not prefer
train
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the train
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 to reach work.
Besides
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this
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, railway tracks would be expensive to make.
To conclude
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, and give my opinion, I would say that roads are very important to survive in daily routine, and
ministry
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the ministry
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need
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needs
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 to focus on
maintain
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maintaining
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 and
work
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working
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 on timely.

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introduction conclusion present
The essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion that clearly state the writer's position. There's an attempt to include both, but they are not effectively formulated to present a strong argument on the topic. A more structured approach is needed.
logical structure
The essay does not form a strong logical structure. There are disconnected ideas and a lack of clear progression from one idea to the next. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, leading to confusion.
supported main points
While the essay attempts to support the main points with arguments, the support is insufficient and the points are not well-developed. More detailed explanations and relevant examples would strengthen the argument.
complete response
The response does not completely address the task. The position taken by the writer is stated but not sufficiently developed or supported with clear and comprehensive ideas and relevant examples. The essay should address more aspects of the prompt in a detailed and nuanced way.
clear comprehensive ideas
The ideas presented in the essay are not clear and comprehensive. To improve, the essay needs to elaborate on the points with greater clarity, making sure the ideas presented directly address the essay prompt.
relevant specific examples
The use of specific examples is limited and not particularly relevant to the argument. Examples need to be clearly linked to the points being made and directly related to the topic at hand, enhancing the argument's strength.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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