Fast food is becoming a part of people's daily life everwhere, and this has had negative effects on our lifestyle and diet. Do you agree or disagree?
It is clear that
,
fast foods are consumed by Remove the comma
apply
people
in the
every corner of the world and it has bad impacts on our daily life Remove the article
apply
as well as
diet
. Correct pronoun usage
our diet
This
essay agrees that outsider foods are dangerous for us. Firstly
, it makes us fat and secondly
, we turn into unsocial and alone.
Taking excessive fast foods make
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makes
people
obese. Nowadays we are highly dependened
on street Correct your spelling
dependent
food
. But we are not aware about
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of
it's
side effects. Replace the word
its
This
type of food
contains too much fat contents
and other ingredients Fix the agreement mistake
content
such
as,
sugar and sodium. These two ingredients are dangerous for our Remove the comma
apply
health
. It destroys our body shape. For example
, in USA
, most Correct article usage
the USA
of
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apply
the
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apply
people
order restaurants
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restaurant
food
by
online and Change preposition
apply
then
consume with
their family. Correct pronoun usage
it with
As a
result
obesity Add a comma
result,
rate
are increasing day by day in the United States.
High consumption of street Fix the agreement mistake
rates
food
makes our life introvert
and unsocial. The consumption rate of Replace the word
introverted
restaurants
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restaurant
food
increasing rapidly. Therefore
people
are affected by various diseases and health related
problems Add a hyphen
health-related
such
as heart disease and cancer. Because having too much sugary and oily food
attracts various virus
and bacteria, which carry diseases. Fix the agreement mistake
viruses
People
, who affected
by certain types of Add a missing verb
are affected
health
problems, often hide themselves
from Remove the pronoun
apply
the
society. They can not easily enjoy their natural lifestyle. Correct article usage
apply
Eventually
society Add a comma
Eventually,
neglets
them from for Correct your spelling
negates
the
Change the word
their
health
conditions. Such
behaviours from neighbours discourage them to
contact with the world. Change preposition
from
For instance
, a survey took
place in India in 2020 showed thatCorrect pronoun usage
that took
,
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apply
about
about 83% under 18 years old failed to make new friends because of their Change preposition
apply
health
issues.
To conclude
, too much sugary and oily food
called fast food
contributes in
obesity problems and Change preposition
to
turn
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turns
people
into unsocial and alone.Submitted by sahareatushar124 on
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