The graph below shows the number of visitors to three museums between 2000 and 2005.
The bar chart highlights data about the number of visitors who visited
to
the three museums over a five-year period between 2000 and 2005.
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Overall
, what stands out from the graph is that there were
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remarkably
upward Trend in the earnings of both MET which was located in New York and Correct article usage
a remarkably
National
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the National
museum
of China Capitalize word
Museum
while
the income
of Edo-Tokyo saw a considerable decline over the period in the
question. Another interesting point is that Edo-Tokyo was the most popular Correct article usage
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museum
in the beginning , but in ending
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the end
National
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the National
museum
which was Capitalize word
Museum
sited
in China was visited by Verb problem
located
huge
rate of voyagers than the others.
Looking at the details, as regards American Add an article
the huge
a huge
museum
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museums
income
started at 12 million visitors in 2000, then
there was a fluctuation over the next 2 years, at which point it leveled
off at 6 Change the spelling
levelled
millions
until 2002. Earnings dipped slightly and recovered. Change to singular
million
Then
the figure went up considerably finishing at around 14 millions
in 2005. If we look at Change to singular
million
Edo-Tokyo
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the Edo-Tokyo
museum
, it has remained stable at approximately 13 millions
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million
,
and comes and Remove the comma
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decreases
slightly, reaching Wrong verb form
decreased
at
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millions
in 2005.
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million
By contrast
, the income
of National
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the National
museum
went in the opposite direction. Earnings of Capitalize word
Museum
National
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the National
museum
increased steadily year on year .The Capitalize word
Museum
income
started from 6 millions
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million
of
voyagers in 2000 and hit a peak at approximately 15 million in 2005.
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