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The table gives details of world electricity production by renewable

The table gives details of world electricity production by renewable
#world #electricity #production
The presented table delineates the four different sources of renewable energy
productions
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production
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 in the world from 2009 to 2012. In general, it is conspicuous that there was an increase
of
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in
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 all sources in the time
of
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apply
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frame.
In addition
, an interesting point is that solar was the most dramatic increase
of
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in
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 total production and Hydraulic contributed the highest number of
watt hours
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watt-hours
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 from generating electricity in the observed periods. Turning to the top three
generator
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generators
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, namely Hydraulic, Bio-mass, and Wind, The Hydraulic always dominated among others by contributing more than 3000 watt hours every
years
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year
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, starting from 3329 and reaching a peak at 3663.4.
Likewise
, from 2009 to 2012, Bio-mass and Wind
also
 had the same trend by soaring twice for wind and a half for Bio-mass. As regards the rest of
categories
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, the most significant growth
experienced
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was experienced
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 in Solar,
by
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reporting 21 TWh in 2009, rising modestly until 2011,
then
 skyrocketing and reaching a climax point at 104.5.
In addition
, Geothermal showed relatively constant compared to others by generating around 67 to 71 for 4 years.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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