This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.

This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates data about the
percentage
of four various materials like
paper
&
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and cardboards
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cardboards
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cardboard
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, glass containers, aluminium cans and plastics
were
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that were
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recycled over the
period
between 1982 and 2010 in a particular country.
Overall
, the graph clearly reveals that
recycled
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the recycled
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proportion
of two materials which were
paper
paper
&
cardboards
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cardboard
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and glass containers had gradually increased over the
period
of
years
with Little fluctuations.
Likewise
,
proportion
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the proportion
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of aluminium cans had increased rapidly.
Whereas
, plastics
remains
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remain
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constant.
Recycled
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The recycled
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percentage
of two different materials which were
paper
&
cardboards
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cardboard
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and glass containers
had
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apply
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increased gradually with just above 60 to 70
percentage
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per cent
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and 50 to 60
percentage
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per cent
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each respectively over the
period
of
years
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the years
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1982 to 2010.
Furthermore
,
recycled
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the recycled
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proportion
of aluminium cans had
raised
Verb problem
risen
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rapidly with just below 10 to above 40
percentage
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per cent
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over the
period
of
years
1985 to 2010.
Whereas
,
recycled
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the recycled
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proportion
of plastics remained constant over the span of
years
1989 to 2010.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, paper, period, proportion, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • recycled
  • materials
  • increased
  • paper and cardboard
  • plastic
  • glass
  • metal
  • significant increase
  • relatively stable
  • fluctuating
  • period
  • starting
  • reaching
  • gradually increasing
  • remained low
  • experienced
  • showed
  • greatest
  • proportion
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