The inequality between rich and poor nations is now wider than it has ever been before. What do you think are the main causes of this difference and what do you think can be done to reduce the gap? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Many people argue that

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inequality more and more

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increases

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in today’s

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world, and the gap

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poor and wealthy

countries

also

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more and more is stretched. From my perspective, I agree with

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view. Speaking of cause, I think there are many

reason

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affecting

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view, but there are three main causes that directly

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impact

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quality of

education

, employment and a lack of

frastructure

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infrastructure

and technology. In developing

countries

national

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education

system is not given attention

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to people’s knowledge

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lower than

developed

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countries

As a result

, those

countries

have no

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workforce to develop their country.

Besides

, the lack of

frastructure

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infrastructure

and technology

also

plays a fundamental role in the advance of a country but they do not have enough financial

resourses

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resources

to invest.

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, in developed

countries

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is given a lot of attention

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national

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education

system and they

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a lot of resources

form

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public finances to invest

infrastructure

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and technology.

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, The US provides free

education

for children

along with

policies to attract human resources from

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countries

, they have a

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workforce to contribute

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development of

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this

disparity can be reduced

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many ways. First of all, helping poor

countries

get an

education

can improve their

live

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and the best form of help is development aid.

In addition

, governments and charities from developed

countries

can help by building schools basic

education

systems.

Moreover

, richer nations and

multi-national

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companies may invest in long-term projects and help by creating a lot of jobs in developing nations. In a nutshell, the disparity

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poor and wealthy nations is unavoidable.

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, developed

countries

can help developing

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many ways.

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to our world

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better.

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task achievement

Your essay generally addresses the task, mentioning causes such as education, infrastructure, and employment, and suggesting development aid as a solution. However, it lacks a more nuanced discussion and specific examples that would increase task achievement. To improve this aspect of your writing, aim to explore the causes and solutions in greater depth and provide clear, specific examples to illustrate your points.

coherence cohesion

The essay shows an effort to organize ideas and includes both an introduction and a conclusion. However, the coherence of the essay suffers due to some disjointed sentences and lack of clear topic sentences. For improvement, you should work on constructing logical paragraphs that each contain one clear main idea, supported by subsequent explanatory or example sentences.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

for example
for instance
to illustrate this
to give a clear example
such as
namely
to illustrate
take, for example

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

289 words

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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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