With the rise of E-books comes the decline in paper books.Some people see this as a good steps forward while others do not.What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

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E-
books
or electronic
books
are
form
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of
books
that can be read on digital
device
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devices
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. The
trend
of
E-
books
makes
paper
books
diminish. In
this
essay, I will discuss about good points and bad points of
this
trend
. First of all,
E-
books
are computer files. You can store them
in
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on
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your tablet or your mobile phone as
many
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much
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as you like and carry them with you.
Hence
, it's more convenient for you to carry
E-
books
than
paper
ones.
Furthermore
, most
books
are available in online
stores
in the
form
of
E-
books
. So, you don't have to go to a
book store
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bookstore
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to look for the
book
you want. Just search
it
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for it
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online and after you
purchase
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purchase it
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, you can read it right away. It is
also
easy to keep
E-
books
. Every online
stores
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record
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records
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what you have purchased. Even if you lose your device or change it, you can still access your purchased
E-
books
in an online store.
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The convenience of
E-
books
may encourage
people
to read more.
On the contrary
,
increase
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the increase
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of
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people
reading
E-
books
makes
demand
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a demand
the demand
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of
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for
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paper
books
decline.
Therefore
,
this
affect
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affects
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book
stores
and
the
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publishers.
Book
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Bookstores
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stores
will have
less customer
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fewer customers
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because everyone can buy
E-
books
at home. They might need to offer a promotion or discount price to customers to attract them. Publishers have to adapt to
this
new situation. They should release more
books
in electronic
form
than in
paper
form
. And
people
who love the feeling of a
paper
more than an electronic screen will
also
be upset with
this
trend
. Because
paper
books
will be scarce, and they
can't
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won't
find the
book
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books
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they want at
book
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bookstores
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stores
anymore. In conclusion, the
trend
of
E-
books
brings both advantages and
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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. Despite the fact that its convenience makes
people
read more
book
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books
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, many
book
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bookstores
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stores
lose their
customer
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customers
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because of
decreasing
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the decreasing
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desire for
paper
books
. Some
shop
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shops
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might have to be closed down.
For
this
reason,
the
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paper
books
will
also
be harder to find for those who prefer
paper
ones.
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Task Achievement
Your introduction provides an appropriate overview of the topic, but it could include a more precise thesis statement outlining the advantages and disadvantages you plan to discuss. This would better prepare the reader for the structure of your essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
In terms of coherence, your essay follows a basic structure with separate paragraphs for advantages and disadvantages. However, the transitions between paragraphs and sentences could be smoother. Consider using a wider range of cohesive devices to link ideas more effectively.
Task Achievement
You have provided some support for your main points, but the essay would benefit from more detailed and specific examples. Consider drawing on real-world scenarios, statistics, or studies to demonstrate the advantages and disadvantages of E-books more concretely.
Task Achievement
Make sure your conclusion summarises the main points of the essay and reflects back on the thesis. Instead of introducing new information, use the conclusion to restate the significance of what has been discussed.
Coherence and Cohesion
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